Start, Stop, Continue #2

Ryan Fochtman

Start, Stop, Continue 

Speech #2

Oscar Award Speech

• Start
• ·      Start being more involved and energetic while speaking in front of the class.
• ·      Walking around more and using my hands adequately to keep people engaged.
• ·      Emphasizing words to direct my point and guide the topic in different directions.
• ·      Slow my speaking down so I don’t get caught up with what I’m going to talk about and focus on what I am saying now.
• ·      Putting more specific examples in my speech to help the audience fully understand what I’m trying to convey.
• ·      I need to bring my voice and body gestures to life to use them to guide the audience through my presentation with a modulation of voice.
• ·      Being more calm and confident in front of the class, I know its nerve racking and ill always be a little fluttered but I want to work on blocking out all the thoughts of messing up and focus on the speech.
• ·      At least for our previous speech I need to show more specific moves and examples of my genre to fully understand its conventions.
• ·      Working on smooth transitions to better improve my speech.
• ·      More practice in front of people and cameras to help watch your body movement and get criticism so help yourself focus on what your doing wrong and fix it.
• ·      Do a conclusion at the end of my speech to wrap up everything I have just gone over and refresh the main points in everyone’s mind.
• Stop
• ·      I would like to stop being nervous and a little awkward in front of the class, conveying a confident attitude is key to a successful speech.
• ·      Sitting still and not utilizing the front of the classroom. I should be walking around and explaining things with my body language and not just by talking.
• ·      Saying um between words and sentences when I’m trying to think of what I’m going to say next, I should already have it down and use smooth transitions.
• ·      Stop feeling nervous and thinking that I am talking to fast or to slow.
• ·      Worrying about the time and making sure I am going to hit the time mark, it is very distrustful and makes me loose focus when I am worrying about a time mark I need to hit.
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• Continue
• ·      Trying to have my speech basically memorized and not rely on the prezi/screen/notecards. Only using the board tog guide my speech in the right direction.
• ·      Using hand gestures and eye contact with the audience and keeping them involved.
• ·      Continue maybe acting out my speech or using more emotion like I had done when I was “surprised” that I won the Oscars and when I was giving off fake thanks to the crowd.
• ·      A calm and collective self image to portray a confident speech
• ·      Pointing at the prezi for specific examples and drawing the attention of the class towards the presentation.
• ·      Trying to have points in my speech that make the audience laugh or has an attention grabber (hook).
• ·      Continue to pick speeches that I am interested in and want to talk about so I am more enthusiastic about the speech and my performance will show.
• ·      Practicing my speech in front of friends and others to help get timing and transitions down.
• ·      Timing my speech on a computer to know how fast I am talking at certain points and decide if it is to long or not long enough.
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• Two Movies My Classmates Did-
• ·      Taka’s Move- Taka did his speech on a motivational sports speech. Where he did the conventions of a pump up speech for either halftime, end of game, and beginning. The move I liked about his speech was connecting the conventions and overall experience to his personal life. He was once in the shoes of the players getting the motivational speech and you could tell he was really into the speech and loved what he talked about. He used past experience and examples to help the class better understand what he went through and what athletes go through that hear these speeches.
• ·      Connor’s Move- Connor’s did his speech genre on interrogations. He went through all the conventions and showed explicit examples. Toward the end he all the sudden slammed the folder down on the counter really loud and violently, like they would in an interrogation. It really grabbed everyone’s attention and had you listening. I really liked that move in the speech because it was an attention grabber and really related to what his speech genre was about.
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• Here is a link to my video on youtube as well as my Prezi I presented in class. (copy and paste)
• Prezi- http://prezi.com/ht3hpszuva4d/?utm_campaign=share&utm_medium=copy
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• Youtube Video- https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=yzN8oNQVldM
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Genre Speech

• Rough Draft- Oscar Speech
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• Conventions-
• Acceptance speech
• ·      Surprised
• ·      May be crying they are so excited, or be YELLING with excitement!
• ·      May be holding up Oscar for everyone to see
• ·      May even kiss the Oscar on stage
• ·      Kiss/hug the host of Oscars or presenter of award
• ·      So incredibly Happy
• ·      Very emotional
• ·      Thankful
• o   For family, friends, producers, people who helped get them here, managers, ect..
• ·      May give an inspirational speech telling how they got there and how hard it was, but to always keep pushing until your dreams come true.
• ·      Crack a joke to get the crowd going
• ·      Talk about what a journey its been to accomplish such an achievement
• ·      Motivate other’s to pursue there goals
• ·      May throw a “move” in, either dance or celebratory move
• ·      Acknowledge sponsors and endorsers
• ·      Dressed to impress
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• Show video clips
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• ·      Analyzing different Oscar speeches and approaches
• ·      See what “move” is taken to win the crowd
• ·      See what approach works more, and is more appealing to the audience

Start, Stop, Continue #1

Start

• ·      Practicing the speech in front of a mirror or record myself multiple times before the real speech to make sure all flaws are dealt with and catch any mistakes.
• ·      Using more hand gestures while speaking to explain certain things and elaborate more.
• ·      Have more confidence while speaking and portraying a speech that puts the audience in the situation.  
• ·      Contextualizing the rhetorical situation and making the audience feel apart of the speech and visualize what I’m trying to say.
• ·      Having an even speed while talking and not slow down too much or speed up too much.
• ·      Adapting my language to the audience, I should have been talking more like a surfer to a surfer conversation than just a normal kid with an idea to expand his industry.
• ·      Memorizing my speech more and not having to rely on notecards.
• ·      Making my speech more clear and organized.
• ·      Speak loud and clear with eye contact.
• ·      Specifically try and put my listeners in my position of the speech and feel like they are in the moment.
• ·      Get the audience involved more and try to throw in jokes and points in the speech that are relatable.
• ·      Start talking with an evenly and confidant tone through out the whole speech adapting my tone.
• ·      Putting more of me and my voice into the speech, instead of having it sound like I’m having a monotone conversation with the world’s best surfer.
• ·      Make pauses in my speech when I am stuck or lost in my thoughts to gather myself and continue.
• ·      Start moving around more and using the space given to look more comfortable and confident.
• ·      Having better transition words between phrases, sentences, and ideas. I would get stuck trying to transition from ideas and thinking ahead of myself.
• ·      Smiling more and having a better overall appearance.
•      Stop-
• ·      Stop using not cards and make sure my speech is fully memorized with confidence.
• ·      Feeling awkward and nervous while speaking. I need to overcome my fear of public speaking.
• ·      Saying “um” and “like” after sentences that I’m not sure what to say.
• ·      I’m going to stop relying on my notecards for what to say next.
• ·      Stop speed talking about what I know and rushing through what I’m tying to say with out breaks.
• ·      Being fidgety and uncomfortable in front of the class.
• ·      Swinging back and fourth. I need to be calm and confident and talk with passion and use the whole floor, or at least more than just standing in the same position.
• ·      Talking to fast when I realized how much time I was at trying to rush the rest of it, which led me to forget some.
• ·      Looking down at my notecard when I don’t need to because I’m nervous and have nowhere else to look.
• ·      Forgetting parts of my speech because I was nervous and couldn’t remember. There was so much more detail I wanted to explain about the surf industry and surf culture that would arise from expanding into states that never have experienced the sport, but I got nervous and forgot…
• ·      Thinking ahead of myself and getting caught up on what’s going to be said, instead of what I’m saying now. I was trying to figure out what I was going to say next and in return messing up what I was already saying.
•     Continue-
• ·      Having a solid intro and with credibility to why I think Kelly should expand his wave pool in every state in America.
• ·      Using hand gestures to help emphasize certain things even though I didn’t do it a lot, this is something I want to work on and continue to improve.
• ·      Eye contact, confidence, and body posture although all need improvement.
• ·      Practicing my speech in front of friends and the camera to help get a better understanding of what I need to improve and elaborate on.
• ·      Incorporating a story that relates my speech to my personal life and help others visualize it better. Bringing in my background information on surfing and being from a state that doesn’t get a beach as its backyard.
• ·      To be enthused and interested in what I am talking about.
• ·      Trying to use pauses instead of getting nervous and saying “um” or “like” and other fillers that distract not only me but also the audience.
• ·      Smiling and portraying a positive attitude towards my peers.
• ·      To research more background information incase I ever get stuck or lost I will be able to go off of other information. I got mixed up in my speech and went off on a different path than originally planned and had to wing it.
• ·      Adapting my language and tone to the audience along with my posture.
• ·      Trying to do the best I can and not worry about mistakes because everyone makes them, and to just move on with the speech and not let it affect the total outcome.
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• Link to my speech-
•             https://youtu.be/NYiFGhrLuPA

Elevator pitch Kelly Slater

I'm stuck in an elevator with Kelly Slater, and my goal is to convince him that he should open wave pools all over America especially in states that don't have access to the ocean. 

Hello Kelly, my name is Ryan Fochtman. First off I'm a huge fan of your surfing career and what you have done to the surf community with cleaning the beaches and oceans as well as shaping the overall way contests are run and scored in the world surf league. I’m aware you just released the longest, open barrel man-made wave in the world. Recently an article came out sharing the wave pool was located in central California. As a fellow surfer originally from Arizona I was gifted with grandparents that lived in Hawaii. I was able to visit each summer and learned the beautiful sport. When I was back home I couldn’t just drive to the beach and go surf for the day because my closest beach was a 6 hour drive to California. Kids all over the U.S are deprived of not being able to ride their first wave because they don’t live near an ocean. I believe you should be opening these perfect barrel wave pools all across America, mostly in places that don't have the easy access to beaches. Opening up the possibility for millions of people to try surfing and make it a larger sport for those without the luxury of coastal access. This could be game changing for the world surf league. Think of how many kids would love to surf in their hometowns but need to drive multiple hours or even fly to get that sensation of being in the water and riding a wave. You could be revolutionizing the surf industry and wave pools all over America. Hope you consider my idea of expanding surfing to the states that never get to experience it. See you out in the water!

About me

Hello, my name is Ryan Fochtman I am originally from the desert (Scottsdale, Arizona). Very hot place to grow up and a major reason I moved here for school. I have lived here 3 years been on and off with school as I was in the process of becoming a resident and needed to work full-time. I am a manager for a valet company around the Sb area and live downtown. I like to go backpacking/camping, surfing, traveling, and basically anything outdoors and active. Looking forward to a great semester with great people and becoming a better public speaker because this is not my strong suit.